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Discussion in 'Trumpet Discussion' started by Jazzy816, Dec 3, 2014.
Edit: Thanks to all who helped!
Sound is nice although it feels a little forced like you're working hard and not quite in control - the slurs down add to this impression.
Good luck with the role you're going for.
So you upload something to the internet, want comments, but want to prefilter how they are. Why can't we call good good and crap crap? My definition of constructive is the naked truth, not some watered down supposed "positive" criticism. With the truth, we know exactly what is wrong - there is no issues about interpretation of what we said. Abuse would be for instance if what you uploaded were only 80% of your capabilities - you would be abusing us. It goes both ways.
Better yet: YOU critique what you uploaded. Then we even know how serious that you are.
Well the good news is you have time to work on it! I agree with TJ, it sounds forced and unrefined. It sounded like the beast and it should sound like the beauty, IMO.
Here is my critique - use whatever you want.
Too loud and blasty
Too much vibrato (a little hokey-sounding to me)
Take the tempo down a notch or so, and play it more sweetly. Remember - this is the song that Mrs. Potts sings as describing the relationship between the two leads. It's supposed to be lyrical and pretty - not something from Maynard's songbook...
Don't just play it - sing it through the horn.
At least it was short...just kidding...
Yeah, work on making it more musical, with some feeling in it.
What I noticed most from the clip is poor breathing. Anytime we can hear a breath with a "hiss", there is unwanted and unneeded tension.
My only critique is that there shouldn't have been a breath at all, unless for some reason there's a written breath mark there. It's 10 seconds - surely you can play 10 seconds without having to breathe to finish the line.
I didn't think that the vibrato was bad though. It sounded like you were pushing it a bit too hard, but that might have just been how the mic picked you up.
I appreciate all the feedback and comments. Just as a pure fact, not to make any excuses, I used the iphone mic (not exactly ideal, I'm aware).
I will slow it down, work on my breathing in general (not necessarily taking a breath for this section though), put more emotion into it, and of course work on making the upper register sound easier.
Critiquing myself (per rowuks request):
-The G wasn't quite in tune, and it was more constricted than I would have liked.
-My A and B were somewhat thin and, as was pointed out, not as open as they should be. Rather than constantly trying to add another note to my musically usable range (hope i'm describing it correctly) I have started refining what I have. That being said, it's by no means wonderful and I intend to spend as much time as needed in the following months to open up and stabilize my current musically usable range.
-The slurs (I guess you could call them that) near the end are something I don't like. I would imagine that the break in the tone is due to me compressing too much and then letting too much go to get back down to the lower notes. This is something I am cognizant of and have every intention of fixing.
As for the quality of the sound, I play in my bathroom. It is acoustically the best sounding room in my house however it is by no means a commercial grade concert hall.